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Melbourne, VIC

‘It was a real mess’: Woman dead, several injured after bus collision

Brisbane Times Alexander Darling, Eleanor Campbell
Summary
Changed after publishing · 3 edits
  • the headline was changed: ‘It was a real mess’: Man Woman dead, several injured after bus collision
  • the headline was changed: ‘It was a real mess’: Teenage boy, Man in his 50s in serious condition dead, several injured after bus crashcollision
  • the headline was changed: ‘It was a real mess’: 18 people being treated Teenage boy, man in his 50s in serious condition after major bus crash

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From the report

A bus and several vehicles have collided on the Melba Highway near Kinglake, sparking an emergency response.

This is a summary. The indicators are not. The scores were measured over this summary alone, which is less of the article than we would like and makes them less certain.

How outlets headlined it

Each outlet's own headline. Struck through: the loaded words our version leaves out. Plainest first.

  • Brisbane Times ‘It was a real mess’: Woman dead, several injured after bus collision plain
  • The Age ‘It was a real mess’: Man dead, several injured after bus collision plain

How this outlet filed it, and how we rewrote it

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Also covered by The Age, The Sydney Morning Herald, WAtoday. We hold only their summary of it, not the report, so there is nothing of theirs to measure here.

Outlet Niral Score
Brisbane Timesas they published this story 15.5

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The same event elsewhere

3 other outlets filed this story. The scoreboard above is what they did differently.

The Age ‘It was a real mess’: Man dead, several injured after bus collision Niral 4.2 political 0 The Sydney Morning Herald ‘It was a real mess’: Man dead, several injured after bus collision Niral 4.2 political 0 WAtoday ‘It was a real mess’: Woman dead, several injured after bus collision Niral 15.5 political 0