A man has died and several other have been injured after a multi-vehicle collision in Victoria’s Yarra Ranges involving a bus carrying 18 people.
Police said they believed 18 people were inside the bus, including the driver.
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Four people inside of bus taken to hospital after multi-vehicle crash in Glenburn.
A man has died and several other have been injured after a multi-vehicle collision in Victoria’s Yarra Ranges involving a bus carrying 18 people.
The driver of one of the cars died at the scene, while the driver and passenger of the other car sustained injuries.
Police said they believed 18 people were inside the bus, including the driver. Paramedics assessed all 21 patients at the scene and transported several people from the bus to hospital.
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The Guardian AustraliaWoman dead and multiple people injured after bus collides with two cars in Victoriaplain
ABC NewsWoman dead, two seriously injured after Yarra Ranges bus crashplain
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