the headline was changed:
Rapists could face life sentences in prison and barristers be prevented from ‘putting victims on trial’ under Victorian Labor reforms
the headline was changed:
Rapists could face life sentences and barristers prevented from ‘putting victims on trial’ under Victorian Labor vows to close loopholes that allow domestic violence perpetrators to ‘slip through the cracks and walk free’reforms
the headline was changed:
Victorian Labor promises new offences vows to close loopholes that allow domestic and family violence ‘loopholes’perpetrators to ‘slip through the cracks and walk free’
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Premier Ben Carroll vows to legislate new form of manslaughter and increase maximum penalty for rape to life imprisonment.
Jones, 40, died on the floor of her Maryborough home in July 2023 after her partner left her there overnight and then waited two hours to call an ambulance after waking to find her cold and not breathing.
Simmons, 42, died in October 2021 after her partner admitted to punching her twice in the face and elbowing her once in the back of the head before leaving her Cranbourne home.
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Jones died on the floor of her Maryborough home in July 2023 after her partner left her there overnight and then waited two hours to call an ambulance after waking to find her cold and not breathing. Her partner pleaded guilty to common assault and failing to report a reportable death.
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Premier Ben Carroll vows to legislate new form of manslaughter and increase maximum penalty for rape to life imprisonment.
A re-elected Victorian Labor government will create two new Australian-first offences aimed at closing “loopholes” it says have allowed perpetrators of family violence to escape punishment.
On Sunday, the premier, Ben Carroll, will announce an election commitment to legislate a new form of manslaughter covering cases in which a person takes their own life as a result of family violence, as well as a new offence covering perpetrators abandoning a victim in need of medical care.
The latter responds to recommendations made by the coroner after the deaths of Belinda Jones and Narelle Simmons.
Jones, 40, died on the floor of her Maryborough home in July 2023 after her partner left her there overnight and then waited two hours to call an ambulance after waking to find her cold and not breathing.
Jones had succumbed to treatable bacterial infections and sepsis, which a hospital failed to diagnose during an emergency presentation days earlier.
Simmons, 42, died in October 2021 after her partner admitted to punching her twice in the face and elbowing her once in the back of the head before leaving her Cranbourne home.
The Coalition last year committed to Jack’s Law and also have plans to expand adult sentencing for youth offenders, increase police numbers and split the existing court of appeal into two separate entities, if elected in November.
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