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'We can see your feet': Man fined for lying next to fridge in car boot

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  • A man has been fined after being pulled over by police while lying next to a fridge sticking out the back of a car.
  • The 46-year-old man was fined $322 for travelling in part of a vehicle not designed for passengers and $1,295 and four demerit points for failing to wear a seatbelt.
  • In the South Brisbane District, police conducted 3,680 random breath tests in two days, resulting in the detection of 23 drink drivers.

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A man has been fined after being pulled over by police while lying next to a fridge sticking out the back of a car.

Queensland Police spotted the car in Joyner, north of Brisbane, with its rear door partially open, a fridge sticking out the back and a man next to it.

An officer said in vision released by police.

The 46-year-old man was fined $322 for travelling in part of a vehicle not designed for passengers and $1,295 and four demerit points for failing to wear a seatbelt.

The driver of the vehicle, a 40-year-old Joyner woman, was fined $690 and three demerit points for going through a red arrow.

In the South Brisbane District, police conducted 3,680 random breath tests in two days, resulting in the detection of 23 drink drivers.

Shortened to 1 minute of reading, this version reads 9.2 on the Niral Score.

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  • ABC News 'We can see your feet': Man fined for lying next to fridge in car boot plain
  • Brisbane Times Man fined more than $1000 for lying next to fridge in moving car plain

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ABC Newsas they published this story 10.9 5 55 40.7
Mundane Readneutralized from ABC News 10.9 5 55 40.7

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