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Isaac Heeney ‘looking forward’ to addressing Banned Sydney Swans players apologise to teammates as banned players they return to club
the headline was changed:
‘We’ll hear them out’: Isaac Heeney ‘looking forward’ to addressing Sydney Swans prepare for teammates as banned players return to club
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Heeney, Warner, Blakey, Jordon and Bice set for exit meetings.
Sydney’s five suspended players are set to make their return and will address the Swans’ playing group “at some point”.
The five have not been at the club since August after they were stood down for breaching club standards following a post-match party at the Pullman Hotel in East Melbourne.
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Heeney, Warner, Blakey, Jordon and Bice set for exit meetings.
The five will ‘have a chat to the broader group and the club’.
Sydney’s five suspended players are set to make their return and will address the Swans’ playing group “at some point”.
Cox arrived at the club’s Moore Park base early on Wednesday morning, before Swans chief executive Matthew Pavlich briefly spoke to media.
“Look, it’s a natural thing that the players will come into the club over the next period,” Pavlich said. “Don’t know exactly when that’ll be, given that the season’s now finished and player exit meetings are occurring.”
The five have not been at the club since August after they were stood down for breaching club standards following a post-match party at the Pullman Hotel in East Melbourne.
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