A woman will appear before court accused of helping a teen after he allegedly shot and killed a man.
Despite the best efforts of paramedics, Macdonald died at the scene.
Two men, aged 18 and 19, were arrested about 30km south-west from where Macdonald was killed in West Hoxton on September 11.
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A woman will appear before court accused of helping a teen after he allegedly shot and killed a man. Despite the best efforts of paramedics, Macdonald died at the scene.
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A woman will appear before court accused of helping a teen after he allegedly shot and killed a man.
Joshua Macdonald, 40, was allegedly shot outside of a home on Bruce St in Merrylands West, Western Sydney, about 3.15pm on September 2.
Despite the best efforts of paramedics, Macdonald died at the scene. Police believe he was mistakenly killed in a botched gangland hit.
Two men, aged 18 and 19, were arrested about 30km south-west from where Macdonald was killed in West Hoxton on September 11.
A week after the teenagers were arrested, police executed a search warrant at a unit in Wollongong on Friday and arrested a 28-year-old woman.
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