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Would you travel over 50 hours for your team? This Dockers fan is

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  • The university student, originally from Perth, is undertaking a journey of more than 50 hours across the globe to see his Fremantle Dockers play in the grand final.
  • From his university in Normal, Illinois, English has watched fervently as his team climbed to the top of the ladder.
  • English then took a bus and a train for an hour to the airport, followed by a two-and-a-half hour flight to Dallas, where he boarded his final 17.5 hour flight to Melbourne.

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That's much what Rafe English is doing.

The university student, originally from Perth, is undertaking a journey of more than 50 hours across the globe to see his Fremantle Dockers play in the grand final.

"I would fly from anywhere to see Freo play in this grand final," English told the ABC during a seven-hour layover in Dallas, Texas, one of many stops on his epic journey.

From his university in Normal, Illinois, English has watched fervently as his team climbed to the top of the ladder.

His journey started with a two-hour train ride from central Illinois to Chicago, where he spent the night.

English then took a bus and a train for an hour to the airport, followed by a two-and-a-half hour flight to Dallas, where he boarded his final 17.5 hour flight to Melbourne.

During his stopover in Dallas, English explained why the Dockers meant so much to him.

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