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Brisbane Lions chase three-peat having remained AFL’s great constant | Jonathan Horn

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  • Excellence has not waned under Chris Fagan and while this is their fourth grand final in a row, it is the first they have gone into as favourites.
  • Crosswell would have been right at home in this Brisbane Lions team.
  • When it’s all chips in, they are peerless.
  • The way the game is played has changed.
  • For Collingwood or Carlton or Adelaide, a lean in patch in March or April can feel like those cities are closing in on a club.

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Crosswell would have been right at home in this Brisbane Lions team.

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Headline as published: Brisbane Lions chase historic three-peat having remained AFL’s great constant | Jonathan Horn

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Excellence has not waned under Chris Fagan and while this is their fourth grand final in a row, it is the first they have gone into as favourites.

“G ive me 80,000 people at the MCG and I was Hercules,” Brent Crosswell once said. Crosswell would have been right at home in this Brisbane Lions team. When it’s a sleepy shift in western Sydney or Tasmania, they drift.

When it’s all chips in, they are peerless.

In that time, the competition has changed. The way the game is played has changed. Their grand final opponents have all dipped in and out of contention.

Every six or seven weeks, they will throw in a howler. Against the weaker teams, they’ll toy with them like a cat with a piece of string, and will win the match in 10 minute bursts of interest. Against the stronger teams, especially at the Gabba and the MCG, they will come with nostrils flared.

Even when they are locked in, they have their flaws. All year, they have conceded big scores. Brodie Kemp put four goals on them in a dozen minutes.

By the end of the season, their defensive numbers were about the same as North Melbourne’s. This finals series, they have conceded an average of nearly 20 goals a game.

The coach, Chris Fagan, is not afraid to give them a rocket.

For Collingwood or Carlton or Adelaide, a lean in patch in March or April can feel like those cities are closing in on a club.

Shortened to 1 minute of reading, this version reads 9.2 on the Niral Score.

You are reading our version, not theirs. This is The Guardian Australia (Sport)'s report shortened to its most important sentences, in plainer words, with verdicts and loaded words taken out. Plain description stays, and so do adjectives that carry a fact, such as "former" or "federal". The reporting, the facts and the quotations are theirs — quotations are never edited — and the indicators beside it measure this version. Hover or tap Adjectives to see every one left in the text.

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The Guardian Australia (Sport)as they published this story 12.4 22 24 0.2 51.3
Mundane Readneutralized from The Guardian Australia (Sport) 11.1 21 24 0.2 51.3

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