Family and friends have paid tribute to 11-year-old Delilah Peterson as a “beautiful girl” who was taken far too soon in a fatal crash in Adelaide’s southern beaches.
Delilah was killed when the Nissan Pulsar she was travelling in collided head-on with a Subaru on Commercial Rd at Moana about 7pm on Tuesday.
Witnesses said the driver of the Subaru, a 37-year-old man from Seaford Meadows, suffered injuries but had at once tried to help those trapped in the wreckage.
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Family and friends have paid tribute to 11-year-old Delilah Peterson as a “beautiful girl” who was taken far too soon in a fatal crash in Adelaide’s southern beaches.
A fundraiser launched on behalf of Delilah’s parents, Sarah and Kyle, describes an outpouring of grief from loved ones following the incident at Moana on Tuesday night.
The fundraiser has been established to help Delilah’s family give the 11-year-old “the beautiful, loving and peaceful farewell she deserves”.
Delilah was killed when the Nissan Pulsar she was travelling in collided head-on with a Subaru on Commercial Rd at Moana about 7pm on Tuesday.
“It was like a bomb going off,” local resident Ann Learwood said.
Witnesses said the driver of the Subaru, a 37-year-old man from Seaford Meadows, suffered injuries but had at once tried to help those trapped in the wreckage.
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